Is this a good speech for why my dog is my favourite creature ? advice needed please asapp?

change "relationship between me and my dog" to "relationship between us." be careful of repetition for example, in the first two sentences you have creature. there is also more things i would change but that would take for ever, have somebody that you know help. it would be helpful if you said what grade your in so i could know wether to be harsh or not. well overall you need to change a lot of things.